Tuesday, 12 March 2013

My edit writing test

Here is my edit writing test

It was just the same normal day in room 17. Kids going of to there Literacy classes. Doing their work and do reading with their teacher.

While we were doing our work something mystery happened. All the computers disappeared,even the teachers disappear and, we were sad too because our netbooks were gone to.  
While Paige, Alarzae, Nikki, Ata and Me walked around the school there were hardly no teacher in their classes. So we walked into the senior block and we saw all the senior shouting “ YEAH NO TEACHERS” So all 5 of us had a idea.

We walked over to houses to asked if they can come to be a reliever. But no adults were at home. So were all shouted out “ DEAR GOD PLEASE MAY YOU HELP US FIND OUR TEACHERS, COMPUTERS,NETBOOKS AND OUR PARENT ” But then all of a sudden something weird happen.

A rainbow appeared. So all 5 of us ran back to school as fast as we could and saw the Teachers, Netbooks and Computers back.

What a day I said to my friends what a day. So we all kept doing our things. But then the next day our chairs disappeared. But I said “ Lets leave it for another person”.

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