Today we are practiced re- crating a piece of writing. The first paragraph belongs aldora and the second is mine.
Aldora writing
“yeah” I said happily to myself. I was nearly there. I sprinted to the finish line and made myself happy. I had a drink and then I had a rest. Looking
down at my pretty purple and black shoes, it was all muddy and yucky.
My writing
“YAY” I sang proudly to myself. I was so ecstatic that I had cross the finish line. As I past the fountain I had a drink, then I sat down. Looking at my shoes they were covered with thick mud. We all felt exhausted.
down at my pretty purple and black shoes, it was all muddy and yucky.
My writing
“YAY” I sang proudly to myself. I was so ecstatic that I had cross the finish line. As I past the fountain I had a drink, then I sat down. Looking at my shoes they were covered with thick mud. We all felt exhausted.
1 comment:
Hi Puawai,
I really like your sentence begings and how your detail is really interesting. Keep up the cool work!
from Hannah
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